Kia Ora Hannah, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your writing, because I love how much detail you put about what you were thinking inside of your head. In my piece of writing I made it seem all sad, but you made it seems frustrating. Next time maybe you could check the beginning of your writing because I didn't quite understand it.
Gargee HPS hpsgargeej.blogspot.co.nz Have a happy holiday!
I really enjoyed reading your story about Acid Rain. I particularly liked your description of the trees - comparing what they look like no to before the Acid Rain fell paints a great picture in the readers mind.
We're so lucky that we live in a reasonably clean and healthy environment, and that people are always coming up with new ways of protecting us and our environment from things like Acid Rain.
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Kia Ora Hannah,
ReplyDeleteI thoroughly enjoyed reading your writing, because I love how much detail you put about what you were thinking inside of your head. In my piece of writing I made it seem all sad, but you made it seems frustrating. Next time maybe you could check the beginning of your writing because I didn't quite understand it.
Gargee HPS
hpsgargeej.blogspot.co.nz
Have a happy holiday!
Hello again,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your story about Acid Rain. I particularly liked your description of the trees - comparing what they look like no to before the Acid Rain fell paints a great picture in the readers mind.
We're so lucky that we live in a reasonably clean and healthy environment, and that people are always coming up with new ways of protecting us and our environment from things like Acid Rain.
Blog ya later!
Mikey :)